Sadly the story is overlong and took too long to arrive at the sex and the punchline. I grew weary of Dean's introspection and felt the need to skim much of the middle section. However with some editing this could be awesome.
“It's now very common to hear people say, 'I'm rather offended by that.' As if that gives them certain rights. It's actually nothing more... than a whine. 'I find that offensive.' It has no meaning; it has no purpose; it has no reason to be respected as a phrase. 'I am offended by that.' Well, so fucking what."
― Stephen Fry (on censorship)